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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 10:47 pm |
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6/17/13 page 56 "There was a war in 1967 where a lot of nations came against Israel and Israel won and won ground." ummm, this sounded like a 5th grader wrote it so i tried to rewrite to make bear sound a little more intelligent, at least like an 8th grader "There was a war in 1967 when several nations fought against Israel. Israel won and won ground."
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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 10:57 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/17/13 per this rule: Italicize foreign words. http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/566/1/ I have italicized cui bono on the following pages: ix, 25, 52, 58
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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 11:21 pm |
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bear Guest
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JOE, I need some help on page 57. The sentence currently reads: You are led to believe that Zionists, the actual PEOPLE, the people running the criminal government, were not provoking the war, deliberately. I am specifically asking about the word deliberately. It is interesting the way it appears at the end of the sentence because the sentence can mean multiple things: 1. You are deliberately led to believe that Zionists, the actual PEOPLE, the people running the criminal government, were not provoking the war. or 2. You are led to believe that Zionists, the actual PEOPLE, the people running the criminal government, were not deliberately provoking the war. or 3. You are deliberately led to believe that Zionists, the actual PEOPLE, the people running the criminal government, were not deliberately provoking the war. I am thinking if you meant either 1 or 2 that I should move the word deliberately to the appropriate spot. If however, your intent was number 3 we could leave deliberately where it is at the end of the sentence, but folks may or may not pick up on the intention.
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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 11:36 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/17/13 page 56 The familiar story is that the aggressor, seeking to gain land promised to themselves, create a false flag event where the aggressors dress up as their victims. They slaughter people, such as the people on the U.S.S. Liberty. Blame that on their victims so as to "justify" the taking of "The Promised Land" from the native population who are already existing on that "Promised Land." Added "s" to the first aggressors. Added italics and changed wording last phrase: The familiar story is that the aggressors, seeking to gain land promised to themselves, create a false flag event where the aggressors dress up as their victims. They slaughter people, such as the people on the U.S.S. Liberty, and blame that on their victims so as to "justify" the taking of "The Promised Land" from the native population who already exist on that "Promised Land."
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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 11:43 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/17/13 page 56 It can get complicated, of course, and so then you need to have an official member of the defending nation to explain the justifications for these things, of course, and what happens in the unfortunate event when the targeted victims win? Split into 2 sentences and removed extraneous "and" & "to": It can get complicated, of course, so then you need to have an official member of the defending nation explain the justifications for these things, of course. And what happens in the unfortunate event when the targeted victims win?
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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 11:52 pm |
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6/17/13 page 56 If the good guys won the 6 day war as History tells "us," Capitalized and hyphenated 6-Day War: If the good guys won the 6-Day War as History tells "us,"
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| Posted: Mon Jun 17th, 2013 11:56 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/17/13 page 56 Places with people already occupying the land promised to whom by whom? Added quotation marks for ironic emphasis: Places with people already occupying the land promised to “whom" by “whom”?
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 01:28 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 58 "The point is getting across. Person A doesn’t skip out on rent." added hyphen: "The point is getting across. Person A doesn’t skip-out on rent."
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 02:32 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 58 The World Reserve Currency POWER, having been a huge criminal process of taking power from other people and having that power benefit those people who FINANCE that power, is "skipping out on rent." And the records can show that without any room for doubt, all meticulously recording in documented fact. added hyphen to skip-out and changed recording to recorded: The World Reserve Currency POWER, having been a huge criminal process of taking power from other people and having that power benefit those people who FINANCE that power, is "skipping-out on rent." And the records can show that without any room for doubt, all meticulously recorded in documented fact.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 02:51 pm |
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JOE, I NEED HELP. I DON'T THINK THIS SENTENCE MAKES SENSE, But I think I understand the intent so I moved the words around a little bit. CAN YOU PLEASE LOOK AT THE FINAL SENTANCE BELOW TO SEE IF IT IS CORRECT? 6/18/13 page 58 A victim of this big lie, this Dollar Hegemony, the new Caesar, with "that which is Caesar's," moves power inequitably from the victims to the criminals. changed to: A VICTIM of this big lie (this Dollar Hegemony) is ONE WHO HAS "that which is Caesar's," as the new Caesar moves power inequitably from the victims to the criminals.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 03:20 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 58 In a relative sense, and I can illustrate this sense better, more accurately, those who "own" or "control" the Monopoly Power benefit by having that control. changed comma to colon: In a relative sense, and I can illustrate this sense better, more accurately: those who "own" or "control" the Monopoly Power benefit by having that control.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 03:37 pm |
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6/18/13 page 58 The Criminals who co-op the home field victims, or subjects, duping them into cooperating do so by "spreading the wealth" during the BOOM part of the Business Psycho. And during that time, in that sense, those who benefit are skipping out on the rent, or in other words, getting something for nothing, and in other words receiving stolen goods, and in other words getting a piece of the action, and in other words aiding and abetting criminals, and in other words profiting from aggressive wars for profit, and in other words: evil. changed punctuation for readability: The Criminals who co-op the home field victims, or subjects, duping them into cooperating, do so by "spreading the wealth" during the BOOM part of the Business Psycho. And during that time, in that sense, those who benefit are skipping-out on the rent. In other words: getting something for nothing; and in other words: receiving stolen goods; and in other words: getting a piece of the action; and in other words: aiding and abetting criminals; and in other words: profiting from aggressive wars for profit; and in other words: evil.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 04:38 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 58/59 Acknowledging the facts could turn someone around and instead of ignorantly supporting those crimes with material support in the form of earnings (surplus wealth or Power to Purchase) the person acknowledges that support flowing in that way. And instead of doing nothing to stop that power flowing that way, the then aware person having acknowledged the facts, can begin to work to stop supporting those crimes in those ways. Broke into another separate sentence and added italics: Acknowledging the facts could turn someone around. And instead of ignorantly supporting those crimes with material support in the form of earnings (surplus wealth or Power to Purchase), the person acknowledges that support flowing in that way. And instead of doing nothing to stop that power flowing that way, the then aware person, having acknowledged the facts, can begin to work to stop supporting those crimes in those ways.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 10:43 pm |
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bear Guest
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JOE, NOT SURE HOW THIS SENTENCE SHOULD READ 6/18/13 page 59 says: Progress toward war is carefully monitored, well documented, FACT. Should it be: Progress toward war is a carefully monitored, well documented FACT. or Progress toward war is carefully monitored, a well documented FACT.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 11:00 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 60 "Skipping out on Monopoly Game rent:" removed bear font and quote marks as the line seems to more yours than mine. Also added hyphen: Skipping-out on Monopoly Game rent:
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 11:27 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 60 When China has the World Reserve Currency POWER, no longer U.S.A. Inc. (LLC), added comma: When China has the World Reserve Currency POWER, no longer U.S.A., Inc. (LLC),
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 11:30 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 60 If that is not easy to see, for anyone else, so be it, and I can be wrong, but those are well documented facts to be known, or not known. Simple math, simple stuff, easy to know stuff, a third grader can know this stuff. So what is the problem? added hyphens: easy-to-know stuff
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 11:32 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 60 "Person A doesn’t skip out on rent." added hyphen: "Person A doesn’t skip-out on rent."
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 11:35 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/18/13 page 60 In a specific sense, so far, Person A doesn't skip out on rent. A factual statement, so far. changed punctuation (again): In a specific sense, so far Person A doesn't skip out on rent: a factual statement, so far.
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| Posted: Tue Jun 18th, 2013 11:51 pm |
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bear Guest
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6/19/13 page 60 If that exchange, documented fact, could be known precisely, exactly, each step of the way. If such an understanding, precise, accurate, knowledge, the entire transaction, could be accountable as an inequitable transaction, whereby Person A "made a killing" at the expense of another person living in China. Perhaps a person his same age, but a person who for now, is on the wrong end of the Legal Money Monopoly World Reserve Currency POWER stick: there is accurate judgment in that case. changed punctuation and added the words that (first line) & then (last line) for readability: If that exchange, that documented fact, could be known precisely, exactly, each step of the way; if such an understanding (precise, accurate knowledge, the entire transaction) could be accountable as an inequitable transaction whereby Person A "made a killing" at the expense of another person living in China (perhaps a person the same age, a person who for now is on the wrong end of the Legal Money Monopoly World Reserve Currency POWER stick); then there is accurate judgment in that case.
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