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| Posted: Wed Jun 26th, 2013 06:04 pm |
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Joe, it is almost 5 now and I have been home for about 30 minutes today. I was not able to work as much on editing as I had wished. Here is what I have completed thus far: I still have a little more than a page to edit. I will continue unless I hear differently. But I am going to rest abit now and I have church tonight. First paragraph: Added comma between: fast & but. Started new sentence after: their pay instead (I did this because the sentence is transitioning from a statement to a question.) Started new sentence/removed: And New Separated 2nd Paragraph: Started a new paragraph: after liars (I did this to focus on the question that is asked I am assuming that the question you are referring to is the question following the statement, not the questions preceding the statement.) Added colon: between alone & how (Also capitalized How) Removed comma between: lies & and (because the comma is only needed in a list or between two independent clauses) Italicized: we & we the people (for emphasis) Replace comma with ellipse between: sun & who 3rd Paragraph: Changed word from: done to perpetrated (just because I didn’t think done sounded good.) 4th Paragraph: No Changes 5th Paragraph: Removed comma between: liars & in (this is an essential clause see http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/566/1/ ) Removed 3 commas and replaced with: Parenthesis & dash SOMETHING FOR YOU TO CONSIDER IN PHRASE: all crimes made legal (Consider removing the word all, since all may or may not be able to be quantified as 100%.) Removed words: when all that (to help sentence flow) Replaced comma with question mark between: out & what (Started new sentence and capitalized: What) Replaced question mark with colon between: Next & What Replaced colon with period between: effort & then (Started new sentence and capitalized Then) 6th Paragraph: Added WITH between: sing & the ---------------- Content with edits included: Pending Collapse or Golden Opportunity? News travels fast, but propaganda travels faster when the criminals take over. Such is our fate when Liberty is forsaken, dropped like an old shoe, in favor of investments in lies. When the liars who invent the best lies are given the opportunity to fix their own pay rate, they don’t, they raise their pay instead. How well does that work, and what can be expected from liars? So the question is asked, and not by me alone: How much longer can the investors in lies and the investors in wars that are so good for the economy…how much longer can we, you know we, how much longer can we the people afford to keep on giving while the measurable benefits dry up, as the supply of ready victims are merely corpses rotting in the sun…who is going to be left to do the actual work? What happens when the supply of frauds, robbers, pedophiles, rapists, kidnappers, slave masters, extortionists, drug pushers, torturers, serial killers, and war makers (for fun and profit, all made legal) reaches that condition of oversupply? When is it enough? When is it no longer beneficial to pay those high rates for all that crime perpetrated by those in office? When do we no longer get paid anything in return? What happens after the fall? What happens when the demand for very high paid liars in public office (hired to cover up all the other crimes - all crimes made legal) peters out? What happens next: when this process reaches that point of collapse, when the inevitable result of the law of diminishing returns takes hold, and that beast won’t let go without an inspired return to a demand for honest effort. Then what? Do we demand more of the same in a different suit, with a different flag, and another color of fraud money? Do we get a new song to sing with the same old tune? --------------------
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| Posted: Thu Jun 27th, 2013 12:22 pm |
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bear, I wonder if we can make a deal on this team we have in writing, as my thoughts are leaning toward a ghost writer name whereby neither of us take credit for our work. I don't know if that is agreeable, but it sounds agreeable as far as my part is concerned. How about a ghost name like this: Epictetus The idea is not to hide my name, or disguise me, the idea is first to acknowledge the fact that I am not the only contributor to the effort to write the message offered, another idea is to return to some sense of American history since it was traditional, I suppose that is the right word, traditional, or it was "in fashion" to use ancient names when speaking through newspapers in the effort to negotiate Liberty in early America. The other idea behind this specific Ghost name is to call attention to that specific name in history. Stocism was, in my way of speaking, for Liberty , or against Legal Crime, in fact, not only in words. In other words the Stoics were of the mind that you can't join them to beat them, you beat them by not being them. Does that make sense? I like your edit work so far, and I have some ideas for my own editing, but I will wait for you to finish edit work on the 1776 magazine submission.
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| Posted: Thu Jun 27th, 2013 03:56 pm |
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My notebook updated to Internet Explorer 10 and I am having fitts getting to certain websites and getting videos to play. I have very limited RAM...just thought I'd let you know of my technical difficulties as of late! Here is my thought on philosophy: Colossians 2:8 KJV Beware lest any man spoil you through philosophy and vain deceit, after the tradition of men, after the rudiments of the world, and not after Christ. It matters not to me if you want to have a ghost name, but I don't want to have that ghost name, but you can have it. That does not matter to me. It does not matter to me that I have any name at all or any credit at all. So what I am saying is, "Go for it." and I will tag along but please do not make me be a stoic. I am a Christian. My allegiance is to the Lord Jesus Christ and the Written Word of God. And to me, Joe, that is the only writing that matters. The words in the Bible are not a man's words. They are the Very Word of God. OK so you can call yourself Epictetus and that is fine by me. --------------------- Here is what I have completed so far. I have to stop and rest before the evening round of activities hits. It looks like I have 1/2 a page left, but I am not ready to tackle it. First paragraph: Added comma between: fast & but. Started new sentence after: their pay instead (I did this because the sentence is transitioning from a statement to a question.) Started new sentence/removed: And New Separated 2nd Paragraph: Started a new paragraph: after liars (I did this to focus on the question that is asked I am assuming that the question you are referring to is the question following the statement, not the questions preceding the statement.) Added colon: between alone & how (Also capitalized How) Removed comma between: lies & and (because the comma is only needed in a list or between two independent clauses) Italicized: we & we the people (for emphasis) Replace comma with ellipse between: sun & who 3rd Paragraph: Changed word from: done to perpetrated (just because I didn’t think done sounded good.) 4th Paragraph: No Changes 5th Paragraph: Removed comma between: liars & in (this is an essential clause see http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/566/1/ ) Removed 3 commas and replaced with: Parenthesis & dash SOMETHING FOR YOU TO CONSIDER IN PHRASE: all crimes made legal (Consider removing the word all, since all may or may not be able to be quantified as 100%.) Removed words: when all that (to help sentence flow) Replaced comma with question mark between: out & what (Started new sentence and capitalized: What) Replaced question mark with colon between: Next & What Replaced colon with period between: effort & then (Started new sentence and capitalized Then) 6th Paragraph: Added WITH between: sing & the 7th Paragraph: JOE: I am considering the phrase: “of making war ever so good for the economy” and that it applies both to “the fun” and “the profits” so I am editing by removing commas between: fun & and / profits & of Replacing Comma with “and” between: bill & paying 8th Paragraph: No Changes 9th Paragraph Replaced comma with colon between: you & what Removed comma between: insane & find Changed finding to find and added semi colons between (added capitalization to “What” for new sentence) Replaced comma with semicolon between: Waco & or / case& or / (http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/566/1/ Use a semicolon to join elements of a series when individual items of the series already include commas.) Added ellipses in place of commas at the end of the paragraph. Joe, I have not made editing notes for the rest of the article to save time so I could get this part back to you. You can compare the paragraphs with the originals after paragraph 9. OK? Joe, I don’t understand the last part of this sentence: “No way Jose, you utopian dreamer, you fool, and you who defines the meaning of a conspiracy theorist?” Specifically: and you who defines the meaning of a conspiracy theorist? I also do not understand the question mark. Edited version so far: ---------------------------------------------- Pending Collapse or Golden Opportunity? News travels fast, but propaganda travels faster when the criminals take over. Such is our fate when Liberty is forsaken, dropped like an old shoe, in favor of investments in lies. When the liars who invent the best lies are given the opportunity to fix their own pay rate, they don’t, they raise their pay instead. How well does that work, and what can be expected from liars? So the question is asked, and not by me alone: How much longer can the investors in lies and the investors in wars that are so good for the economy…how much longer can we, you know we, how much longer can we the people afford to keep on giving while the measurable benefits dry up, as the supply of ready victims are merely corpses rotting in the sun…who is going to be left to do the actual work? What happens when the supply of frauds, robbers, pedophiles, rapists, kidnappers, slave masters, extortionists, drug pushers, torturers, serial killers, and war makers (for fun and profit, all made legal) reaches that condition of oversupply? When is it enough? When is it no longer beneficial to pay those high rates for all that crime perpetrated by those in office? When do we no longer get paid anything in return? What happens after the fall? What happens when the demand for very high paid liars in public office (hired to cover up all the other crimes - all crimes made legal) peters out? What happens next: when this process reaches that point of collapse, when the inevitable result of the law of diminishing returns takes hold, and that beast won’t let go without an inspired return to a demand for honest effort. Then what? Do we demand more of the same in a different suit, with a different flag, and another color of fraud money? Do we get a new song to sing with the same old tune? What happens when everyone and their mom have joined in the fun and profits of making war ever so good for the economy, and there are no longer any hapless victims left who are footing the bill and paying the National Debt, on schedule, as they are told to do, even while the most effective tax evaders are giving themselves the highest pay rates for jobs done to a high degree of competitive excellence? Now what: punt? In fact, in reality, coming to a theater near you: what happens when the hired liars who have grown fat, stupid, greedy, foolish, and insane find their way into your church, as in Waco; or your home, as in the Vicky Weaver case; or your building, falling down around you, as in 911…for fun and profit…for war and for might making right…right in your life, and right now? Call 911, like the Branch Davidians? “They are shooting again, tell someone to call it off.” When does the pendulum swing too far into mass insanity, passing the point of no return, where those who produce anything worth stealing are outnumbered and outgunned against those who make stealing legal, and like rats on a sinking ship, the remaining survivors have nothing to eat but each other? When do those honest enough to admit the existence of responsibility take the time to look in the mirror and affect an accurate accounting? If done, if done well, is it remotely possible that the accounting process discovers opportunity instead of absolute abject belief in falsehood without question? Could there be, there in the mirror, a source of hope, of competitive invention, a spark of such incredible power as to cause within the observer acknowledgement of a reasonable path to take in avoidance of all the doom and gloom; is it remotely possible? Is there new light on the path that does not require the nailing of innocent people to crosses? Is there a way to avoid nailing anyone, guilty or not, to crosses, a way to avoid making torture legal, for fun, and for profit? No way Jose, you utopian dreamer, you fool, and you who defines the meaning of a conspiracy theorist?
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| Posted: Thu Jun 27th, 2013 06:31 pm |
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JOE Here is the complete edited version. I cannot say that it is perfect. But I am tossing it back to you because you had said you had some ideas. I decided not to rest and finished it instead. We have a busy evening and another busy day tomorrow...next week will be a little slower...I think. Pending Collapse or Golden Opportunity? News travels fast, but propaganda travels faster when the criminals take over. Such is our fate when Liberty is forsaken, dropped like an old shoe, in favor of investments in lies. When the liars who invent the best lies are given the opportunity to fix their own pay rate, they don’t, they raise their pay instead. How well does that work, and what can be expected from liars? So the question is asked, and not by me alone: How much longer can the investors in lies and the investors in wars that are so good for the economy…how much longer can we, you know we, how much longer can we the people afford to keep on giving while the measurable benefits dry up, as the supply of ready victims are merely corpses rotting in the sun…who is going to be left to do the actual work? What happens when the supply of frauds, robbers, pedophiles, rapists, kidnappers, slave masters, extortionists, drug pushers, torturers, serial killers, and war makers (for fun and profit, all made legal) reaches that condition of oversupply? When is it enough? When is it no longer beneficial to pay those high rates for all that crime perpetrated by those in office? When do we no longer get paid anything in return? What happens after the fall? What happens when the demand for very high paid liars in public office (hired to cover up all the other crimes - all crimes made legal) peters out? What happens next: when this process reaches that point of collapse, when the inevitable result of the law of diminishing returns takes hold, and that beast won’t let go without an inspired return to a demand for honest effort. Then what? Do we demand more of the same in a different suit, with a different flag, and another color of fraud money? Do we get a new song to sing with the same old tune? What happens when everyone and their mom have joined in the fun and profits of making war ever so good for the economy, and there are no longer any hapless victims left who are footing the bill and paying the National Debt, on schedule, as they are told to do, even while the most effective tax evaders are giving themselves the highest pay rates for jobs done to a high degree of competitive excellence? Now what: punt? In fact, in reality, coming to a theater near you: what happens when the hired liars who have grown fat, stupid, greedy, foolish, and insane find their way into your church, as in Waco; or your home, as in the Vicky Weaver case; or your building, falling down around you, as in 911…for fun and profit…for war and for might making right…right in your life, and right now? Call 911, like the Branch Davidians? “They are shooting again, tell someone to call it off.” When does the pendulum swing too far into mass insanity, passing the point of no return, where those who produce anything worth stealing are outnumbered and outgunned against those who make stealing legal, and like rats on a sinking ship, the remaining survivors have nothing to eat but each other? When do those honest enough to admit the existence of responsibility take the time to look in the mirror and affect an accurate accounting? If done, if done well, is it remotely possible that the accounting process discovers opportunity instead of absolute abject belief in falsehood without question? Could there be, there in the mirror, a source of hope, of competitive invention, a spark of such incredible power as to cause within the observer acknowledgement of a reasonable path to take in avoidance of all the doom and gloom; is it remotely possible? Is there new light on the path that does not require the nailing of innocent people to crosses? Is there a way to avoid nailing anyone, guilty or not, to crosses, a way to avoid making torture legal, for fun, and for profit? No way Jose, you utopian dreamer, you fool, and you who defines the meaning of a conspiracy theorist? Why not consider the possible ramifications of a National Debt that becomes obviously unaffordable for anyone anywhere: in that moment of clarity, there is then a demand for a replacement; at that moment of clarity, seeking that as yet mysterious supply to fit the demand, the observer considers reaching for a competitive option rather than the one option forced into use by the same known criminals? Why not? The same known liars, the same people, or even better liars (having the old, worn-out ones sent to the pasture) old ones or new ones with new uniforms or new symbols on their stationary, new flags, new versions of the same old thing, only this time the promise is going to pan out as advertised. This time, so forget about last time, this time the same old solution won’t result in the same old result. This time the final solution will work? Hurray! Where is my new flag? Why not invent something competitive to compare to the one final solution this time? Instead of a single source of only one thing, how about running a competitive version up against the one final solution, this time? Instead of obey without question, this time, how about invention and competition? When the door opens, when the old boss is collapsed and out of fashion, when the dollar in the form of a fraudulent Federal Reserve Note (with the National Debt Clock still ticking) is put to rest, discarded, collapsed in upon itself, then, at that moment as the door is open, and before the new final solution to all our economic problems is ushered into place…during that window of opportunity before then becomes now…before before becomes after…before the brain trust trusts in monopoly again: how about competition instead of monopoly? When that happens, that way, as unbelievable, as utopian, as dreamlike as it may seem at first blush, what would happen then, when competition offers many things instead of just offering one thing? When a Republic, such as Utah, offers investors options in the form of bank accounts where deposits of earnings are redeemable in Gold and Silver, and that offering competes with whatever the new form of the final solution might be, then that competitor, in that form, offers an alternative to more National Debt-based, fraud money; then at the same time a Republic, like Alaska, may offer a competitive edge with petroleum backed money for investors; and then at the same time a Republic, like California, may make moves to back their offers to investors with a renewed Space Industry, a growing Solar Panel industry, and an Electric Car industry. Who knows what may be offered from an independent Republic if one exists because The People demand one --or two --or 50, all nice and comfortable and secure in a mutually defensive, voluntary association or Federation. Imagine the possibilities? No, no, no, don’t throw me into that collapse, please! What would I do without high paid liars offering broken promises that never end?
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| Posted: Fri Jun 28th, 2013 11:20 am |
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"please do not make me be a stoic" bear, I don't know how many times I can repeat the concept of not joining, not me, I don't, it is not in me, I'm not a joiner, I don't believe as if turning on a switch that suddenly transports me into membership with believers, which goes for Christians, Mormons, Buddhists, Muslims, Branch Davidians, One Heaven, Two Heaven, Luciferian, Statist, Fascist, Communist, Socialist, Capitalist, Jewish, without reservation. I reserve reservation to not belong, or belong, only to that which I truly belong, or not belong to, as time goes by, and as I may occupied different spaces, and as I may displace whatever is where I will be then. Labels, labels, labels, and some power at work forcing people here and there, and am I that power? "please do not make me be a stoic" The concept of a Ghost Writer had to do with things offered, not things not offered, and at no time have I offered to make you anything, which would not be an offer, it would be making you be something against your will, which is something I am now suspect of desiring? Tongue in cheek? I stumbled upon another idea for another submission, and it was roughly written in a new Category and new Forum here on this Web Site. Thanks for the help on the Collapse or Opportunity submission, I can now work at finishing it up, let it hang out awhile, and then submit it as if it were worth submitting after some reflection. I've been shooting off my mouth so long, rambling at will, that the ideas flow better, but the writing projects are very rough - in need of your generous help in my opinion. Thanks again.
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| Posted: Fri Jun 28th, 2013 03:28 pm |
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Joe,
You make me laugh, Joe. I never thought of it that way. But what if your offer was the ghost name of Lucifer? Would that not be a label of some sort? Is not a Ghost Name taken from an historic person sorta like a label because the reputation of that person is imparted to that name into the mind of the person that reads that name? Like Mark Twain at the DP. Isn't that sort of a label? OK, I am home for a few minutes before my next road trip...I made four 40 mile round trips to the Walmart town up the road...160 miles going to town 20 miles up the road. Crazy. I will resume working on Joe Quotes. I hear we have an audience of expectant readers looking forward to a completed product!
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| Posted: Sat Jun 29th, 2013 10:51 am |
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I sent the final version. Preview may only work for me as I am logged in.
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| Posted: Sat Jun 29th, 2013 03:39 pm |
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I get a 404 page no longer exists message. Thank you though for trying to send me the link. Maybe I will be able to veiw it when published?
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 01:40 pm |
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JOE, bear, I took this off the page for reasons that should have been obvious to me. Thanks for the work on the new project. You are teaching me well, and the work may pay off some day. Who knows?I just went back to look for that information as I thought I remembered seeing something. I was wanting to see your submission. I have had explorer problems so I couldn't even get the 1776 home page to load. I think I may have things finally fixed. Anyways, I am going to do some bookwork now. The oldest is chomping at the bit for a game of Monopoly so I will have to eventually break for the game. The youngest is at camp and the oldest wants to know how many games of Monopoly we are going to get to play this week.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 02:10 pm |
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bear, I took the information off this Forum because that cut and paste included my username and password to gain access to Submissions. I submitted the Collapse or Opportunity article and I have not received any response to that submission, as far as I know. I just sent this to those people: Team, I sent a submission, and I have uses for that submission. I use what I write on Forums. If there is a way I can link your site, where my submission is published, then I could link your site where my submission is published. Absent any information concerning your use of my words I see no need to continue submitting my words into what is to me a dead end at this point. In fact I will publish my submission to you as an example of how information travels in modern times. Here is where I find a use for my submission to you: http://www.dailypaul.com/291071/lindsey-williams-you-positively-must-get-out-of-paper That is at the moment a source of information that is ONE WAY communication. In other words, there are no responses, no discussion, no feedback, no effort to challenge, to improve upon, or to check, and to balance, that information. So I see a use for my submission to your Team. I will publish my submission to your Team, without a link to your On-Line Magazine, since at this point there is perceived by me an opportunity to challenge, improve, and offer productive information in the face of so much Dictatorial Information, and I can do so right at that point in the stream of information. I can delay my effort to publish my offering of a competitive perspective. I can do so because I prefer to link a Web Site with the potential to challenge the Dictatorial Norm. If you can't use my words, I can. Thanks Joe I have another submission already roughly written and I see no reason to continue sending my work to a place that does not offer feedback, at least on The Daily Paul Forum I get the occasional reply to my work. You exemplify such feedback, to my work, from my end, from your end it is a mutual benefit, it is two way communication, or equitable commerce, which is agreement, competition, adaptation, and it is not Monopoly, Dictation, One-Way communication. Someone else at The Daily Paul inspired me to offer a lot of information all arranged into neat order, and that person had offered a lot of information, and so there was again an example of how that works that way. Here: Unorthodox Methods of Discussion If the game Monopoly was combined with the game Risk what would the skills being developed be with that combination? Monopoly teaches the value of enforcing scarcity. Risk teaches the value of enforcing scarcity. Both involve the scarcity of land use. Does that make sense?
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 03:12 pm |
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7/1/13 page 70 So whatever you do with the other counterfeit vote, the votes that won't be counted, is superfluous at best, and counterproductive in a measurable way. As you could have done something useful with the time you spend choosing and then actually voting in the National Election Psycho. Changed "votes" to singular; changed "As" to "since;" changed "spend" to "spent" and revised punctuation: Your vote of sending Federal Reserve Notes to the National Government is the actual vote that counts, it seems to me. So whatever you do with the other counterfeit vote (the vote that won't be counted) is superfluous, at best, and counterproductive, in a measurable way, since you could have done something useful with the time you spent choosing and then actually voting in the National Election Psycho.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 07:52 pm |
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7/1/13 page 70 You are actually playing with psychopaths, and that is the fact of the matter in any way you may want to measure it. It ends up being participation in torture and mass murder made legal. Added comma: You are actually playing with psychopaths, and that is the fact of the matter, in any way you may want to measure it.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 07:58 pm |
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7/1/13 page 70 To me there will be a judgment day, and on that day the vote you cast in Federal Reserve Notes sent to the National Legal Crime Cabal will count much more than your frivolous mark placed on an official sounding National Election computer screen, or card, or paper ballot, but they both will say the same thing. Changed comma to semicolon and removed "and." Also added comma after day. To me there will be a judgment day: on that day, the vote you cast in Federal Reserve Notes sent to the National Legal Crime Cabal will count much more than your frivolous mark placed on an official sounding National Election computer screen, or card, or paper ballot, but they both will say the same thing.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 08:18 pm |
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7/1/13 page 71 You lend moral and material support to torture and mass murder made legal. And not just one person tortured once, legally, and not just one murder victim murdered once, since the scale of these crimes makes Hitler and the Nazi crimes pale in comparison. Since as you have been shown already, it is the same process that was used to finance both Hitler and Stalin; therefore, the body counts are accountable to those specific people who invent, produce, and maintain this THING, which is a process of lending moral and material support to that most egregious crime made legal CABAL that can be known by many names, such as The Dollar Hegemony, denominated in dollars, or the World Bank, or the World Reserve Currency Power, or The New World Order, or Legal Crime, whichever word accounts most accurately. Modified for readability: You lend moral and material support to torture and mass murder made legal (not just one person tortured once, legally -- and not just one murder victim murdered once) since the scale of these crimes makes Hitler and the Nazi crimes pale in comparison. You have been shown already that the same process was used to finance both Hitler and Stalin; therefore, the body counts are accountable to those specific people who invent, produce, and maintain this THING which is a process of lending moral and material support to that most egregious crime-made-legal CABAL that can be known by many names such as: The Dollar Hegemony (denominated in dollars), or the World Bank, or the World Reserve Currency Power, or The New World Order, or Legal Crime…whichever word accounts most accurately.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 08:22 pm |
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7/1/13 page 71 Again, to me, your vote for Romney is pathetic compared to the flow of Federal Reserve Notes that flow from you, and all the other honest productive people, flowing to Legal Crime Central, so... Removed comma before and; changed comma after people to ... Again, to me, your vote for Romney is pathetic compared to the flow of Federal Reserve Notes that flow from you and all the other honest productive people…flowing to Legal Crime Central, so...
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 08:24 pm |
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7/1/13 page 71 What is really important, now that we have spoken about the pathetic stuff? removed comma: What is really important now that we have spoken about the pathetic stuff?
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 08:26 pm |
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7/1/13 page 72 I can't vote for Romney, I do not want that to haunt me for the slightest increment of time, never mind for eternity. Made into 2 sentences: I can't vote for Romney. I do not want that to haunt me for the slightest increment of time, never mind for eternity.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 11:41 pm |
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7/1/13 page 72 If Ron Paul is on the ballot, I have a reason to vote because he may work toward ending The FED, the IRS, and bringing the troops home. modified as follows: If Ron Paul is on the ballot, I have a reason to vote because he may work toward ending The FED and the IRS as well as bringing the troops home.
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 11:48 pm |
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7/1/13 page 72 Evil is evil. Stop supporting it and it will be supported less, and how can that not be obvious, and accurately measurable? Modified as follows: Evil is evil. Stop supporting it, and it will be supported less. How can that not be obvious and accurately measurable?
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| Posted: Mon Jul 1st, 2013 11:52 pm |
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JOE This is confusing to me: "He seemed to listen." [Joe: Not a reference to Romney] ----------------------- I wonder if I should change it as follows: "The person I was talking to seemed to listen"
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