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bear,
I see now the problem you may have identified. I see a problem for sure.
This:
So my power to convey meaning with English and to do so accurately has been, once again, exemplified by the first sentence: poorly. I have a hard time communicating. Then the second sentence intends to show a measure of improvement (in other words), an effort to sharpen the tool.
That should be "the fourth sentence," or the first three sentences should be combined to make one sentence.
Does that make sense?
I could rewrite as such:
I'm Joe and discussion has been a very dull tool in my life up to points in time that inspire the effort to sharpen that tool. Often times the inspiration accompanies dire straits.
Dark Horizons?
In other words a question: What brings people together so as to inspire them to be nice to each other, to cooperate, to compare notes, and to seek better from worse, and at the same time avoid harming each other?
Under Duress?
So my power to convey meaning with English and to do so accurately has been, once again, exemplified by the first introductory sentence above: poorly. I have a hard time communicating. Then the competition (in other words) intends to show a measure of improvement, an effort to sharpen the tool. I intend to offer my end of any discussion - in dire straits - so as to compare notes, to learn, and to teach, to do so fairly, equitably, nicely, politely, if possible - often times failing miserably.
I think that does help avoid the error in communication.
Good find, and thanks again.
This is becoming a much more serious effort to hammer out the words on the anvil as we work at being wordsmiths?