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I went out to breakfast with the guys I once worked along side and having the discussion of the book tabled at breakfast inspires me to return to the book and read through one more time.
I found a possible improvement in keeping my signature endings consistent.
Also: The people at Bookmasters actually called me to see how the book was going, and I'm wondering now if someone actually read the .pdf file of the book text that I sent for a quick format check.
1.
Example:
Pate vii is:
Joe’s words, “Cui bono?”
—bear
Page x has:
I hope the example is worth the cost of reading.
—Joe
While Page 35:
How much of it is prejudice made legal?
—
Joe
2.
Page 4:
The Crusades, and World War II. Knowing how to get past the resistance to factual, accurate information is a handy skill that works to get past and get around the false, inaccurate, deceptive versions of history.
Is it an improvement:
The Crusades, and World War II. Knowing how to get past the resistance to factual
(accurate) information is a handy skill that works to get past and get around the false (inaccurate) deceptive versions of history.
3.
Page 56
"Saying the nation of Israel will only be restored by Messiah and that the humanly done Zionism is not according to God’s Will."
I think those words could be rephrased or as you have suggested those words can be added to a larger context with another sentence or paragraph added to the book.
4.
Page 78
If you were on a Jury (a real Jury, not a counterfeit one), you could ask anyone whose profession is relevant to the case, and you could judge the case on professional evidence discovered during the case, and then actual people could be held accountable for those crimes.
How about the following change?
If you were on a Jury (a real Jury, not a counterfeit one), you could question anyone whose profession is relevant to the case, and you could judge the case on professional evidence discovered during the case, and then actual people could be held accountable for those crimes.
5.
Page 80
The problem with connectivity is such that destructive things can travel as well as productive things, and if someone were to confuse destructive things with productive things, they may BLAME the medium of exchange because they fail to judge the stuff being transferred accurately.
How about the following change?
The problem with connectivity is such that destructive things can travel as well as productive things, and if someone were to confuse destructive things with productive things, they may BLAME the medium of exchange because they fail to accurately judge the stuff being transferred.
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