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I checked my sent folder and I see that you have been sent the file titled: Joe Quotes 09-02-2013.
That is the finished version I have minus the fix on the sentence with a quote error. You have all the changes I made in that file other than that quote fix.
I am curious to here your opinion concerning the changes I made, adding quotes to the ends of chapters, and extending the sales pitch in Sale or No Sale. I also rewrote some of the words in Joe's Law. I do not see any change in the fonts from un-embedded to embedded so far, and that may be something you might not see if there is a change, if you don't embed those fonts with the file you are reading.
I have yet to read through another time. Work was busy for me the past few days.
Pages 56, 57
"Saying the nation of Israel will only be restored by Messiah and that the humanly done Zionism is not according to God’s Will."
bear,
That quote is one of your sentences and I am finally zeroing in on it for possible improvement. I have trouble understanding that sentence even now. Each time I read it I have trouble with it. I get it, I think I get it, in a general sense, but the actual sentence appears to be the source of my trouble. Is it worth the effort to improve it before it is printed in 100 books, and who knows how many copies of E-books?
That sentence may have made much more sense in context with the words before it. It (the sentence) is not now in context, so it may be a good idea to rewrite the sentence, or add the relevant sentences preceding that sentence???
Page 117
The word empathetic is the correct word and so I am replacing the wrong word in this sentence.
"I do so willfully and with great interest. I cannot be emphatic, so defined."