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"The reason Christians and Jews are to do things is to be from a heart that loves God and people."
That sentence conveys much more to me, and it does so with an inventive or creative employment of words, in my opinion.
The use of "are to do" explains the nature of the connection between the subject of authority and the authoritative power.
"The reason Christians and Jews do things is to be because of a heart that loves God."
That version may have been sending the same message, I didn't get it, if so.
If there is yet more in the intended message, ideas or beliefs, a viewpoint, not yet conveyed, then I can't know how better to write the sentence, since I don't know what the intended message is, exactly, but I can guess.
Example: "be from"
My guess is such that the viewpoint considers the options of being from a good place or a bad place, and here again are the concepts of creation: where are we from?
I like the sentence much better because it manages to inspire me to consider many things, whereby the other sentence was too ambiguous for me to even begin to guess the intended meaning.
In fact, the more I think about that sentence, the more I like it, but then again that may merely be my imagination at work.
The Sound of Silence can be deafening when considering all that is unsaid after but –
I also changed wording on page 115:
I heard: “I agree with what you are saying, but” – silence ensued –
That is an example of being much more precise, leaving less room for any creative interpretation, so in that case it is much better for me, since the intended viewpoint is more likely to be conveyed with your welcome improvements.
Joe’s Law and Joe’s Slaw both take time to understand. One is hot and spicy with radishes, or so I hear…the other provides a key to abundance. The recipe for Joe’s Law is shared below. If you want the recipe for Joe’s Slaw, you will have look on page 151. Joe’s Law is used below to prove the point that the American public needs to create and begin using competitive forms of currency.
That fixes that up well.
Counterfeit power does not actually produce power, but consumes power. So The FED is actually consuming power – not producing it…with each lie, which is each unit of counterfeit money…with each purchase, which they alone make when they make money for nothing…and then each time they spend the money they make for nothing but lying, that is consumption…and when they “loan” money, it is a purchase as they actually purchase a borrower – that is called fraud.
That is in my opinion very good, it is a really tough idea, with much too many angles of view all focused into too small of a space, and you have managed to convey the meaning as if the reader is the thinker: along those lines.
Thanks
Four eyes are better than 2
Thanks, that is the message intended with the book, no?
I can convey two things at this point.
1.
My brother Jack, lost his wife, she died in her sleep, complications with dental surgery, or other things, and he has always been one of a kind, a loner type, but he is not, obviously, needing a competitive viewpoint to help him deal with new realities.
2.
A local mom (mother of my daughters past friend: they grew apart after going to different schools) is missing, and 12 Sheriffs descend upon the 2 kids at the home of the missing mother, to steal all the communication information being used by the father to find the mother.
The "law" (probably a prosecutor looking to make money on a conviction of the father) sent 1 Sheriff to "help" the father when the father reported the mother missing on the day that the mother went missing.
12 Sheriffs to steal things from 2 kids.
1 Sheriff to deliver the message that the "law" is in place to commit crimes for profit.
So, I do nothing, but my wife goes to see if she can offer a spare computer to the father who had all his stuff stolen, while he was at work, by the 12 Sheriffs.
The father, in this case, found a spare computer already, one that the 12 Sheriffs failed to find, despite there being 12 of them ransacking the house.
So...we all have our special talents, and for most of us those talents are too well hidden, and therefore having help finding those talents may actually help.
Perhaps, a long shot in my view, but perhaps the "Law" in the case of the missing mother, can find her where the father is so far unable to do so.
There is hope.
Are you ready for the pdf or would you like me to make additional changes?
The book looks done, so send a .pdf, please, and I e-mailed the publisher yesterday to reopen the order if it was closed, but there is no response as of this moment.
There are many competitive publishers if this one is no longer connectable.