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 Posted: Fri Aug 9th, 2013 03:15 pm
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 Book Question (page 147):

 America is almost bled dry. The parasites on the “top” of that pyramid scheme are moving to China when the measuring device is "The Dollar," and that dollar is produced by those Legal Criminals.

Joe, does it make sense to change the word when to while? (This bothered me last time around, but I couldn't put my finger on it.  Today the word change seems to make it easier to read.)  Let me know what you think.

America is almost bled dry. The parasites on the “top” of that pyramid scheme are moving to China while the measuring device is "The Dollar," and that dollar is produced by those Legal Criminals.

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